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Outside the window waves were cresting in slow motion as the tide began to pull away. Each opaque bubble of foam slid across the peaks and valleys of individual ripples that riveted the water.  They did sickening things with the moon’s reflection, swirling it in a myriad of ghostly greens and golds, stretching it out until it was an unnatural oblong setting in the sea.

Just on the other side of the window, the moon was devastatingly still.  Certainly it hadn’t moved in the silence that had rushed in to fill the void left by the spark of the muzzle.  The scene was illuminated just the same.  The flowers looking more purple than blue where they sat in the low light that struck the bedside stand in the corner.  Her bed was mostly darkness, the heavy comforter still pulled over unruffled sheets.  There was a glint of moon off the mirror that hid most of her reflection in dazzling light so all that hung in the glass was the barrel of the shotgun, suspended and alone.

The only motion in the room was the growing pool of his blood, spilling across the floor as it was pulled towards moon like the tide.
©2009 ~Halatia
:iconhalatia:

Author's Comments

I am apparently feeling violent. I put it in mystery cuz it is unlikely that I will ever write something that kinda fits in that category again!

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:iconbrytning:
Your use of descriptions here is very nice. I especially like the line "swirling it in a myriad of ghostly greens and golds."

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"To refuse awards is another way of accepting them with more noise than is normal."
- Peter Ustinov
:iconelmara:
Awesome! I confess I kinda made a face at the shot-gun part, thinking 'not another girl-kills-herself' story but when i read his blood i went :w00t:

i am a shameless man-hater :giggle:

Exceptional use of imagery and setting. well done! :heart:

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what we choose is never what we really need


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:iconhalatia:
I'm glad it was a pleasant surprise (though pleasant may seem a little morbid there...eh, who am I kidding? Man-haters unite!)!

Thanks so much for the thanks and the fav! :D

--
Anyone ever tries to kill you, you try to kill 'em right back.
~ Captain Malcolm Reynolds, Firefly
:iconhalatia:
Thank you so much for the comment. I was worried that I had gone into description-overload with this piece!

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Anyone ever tries to kill you, you try to kill 'em right back.
~ Captain Malcolm Reynolds, Firefly
:iconlunaticstar:
The images of sea and tide and TIDE OF BLOOOOD are quite good. Dramatic and a good lil' read. :D

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If wishes were horses, we'd all be eating steak. - Jayne, Firefly.
:iconhalatia:
Haha TIDE OF BLOOOOOD make me giggle so.

Thanks for the comment!

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Anyone ever tries to kill you, you try to kill 'em right back.
~ Captain Malcolm Reynolds, Firefly
:iconlunaticstar:
You're welcome. :D

--
If wishes were horses, we'd all be eating steak. - Jayne, Firefly.

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